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The chart below shows the number of households in the U.S. by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the U.S. by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates the
number
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 of
households
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 by their yearly
income
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 in millions of
dollars
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 during three different years
2007
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, 2007
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, 2011 and
2015
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2015,
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 in the United States. The
number
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 of
households
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presented
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is presented
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 in millions.
Overall
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, there were some fluctuations observed over the years
for
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in
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annual
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the annual
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income
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 of
households
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.
Firstly
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,
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number
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the number
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 of citizens earning 25000
dollars
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 to 49999 decreased
around
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by around
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 28 in 2015 from 29.5 in 2011.
However
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, residents earning 100000
dollars
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 or more
than
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apply
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that
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apply
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declined in 2011 from 2007 but rose again in 2015. Noticeably,
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of people earning less than 25000
dollars
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 in a year climbed from 25 million
of
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apply
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households
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 to just
bellow
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below
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 30
in
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million in
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 2011
which
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, which
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 dropped slightly in 2015.
Moreover
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,
exact
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the exact
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 same
number
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 of
households
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slightly
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, slightly
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 more than
20
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20,
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 had
income
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 between 50000 and 74999.
Furthermore
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, there
are
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is
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 no
such
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 difference observed for
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households
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household
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income
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which
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, which
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 falls under
category
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the category
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 of 75000 to 99999;
stayed
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it stayed
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 about 15 million.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, households, income, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual income
  • households
  • income distribution
  • peak
  • rise
  • fall
  • stable
  • significant
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • economic conditions
  • policy changes
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