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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious problems, as well as practical problems. To what extend do you agree or disgree with this statement?

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foreign
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 is not a huge challenge
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 everyone can learn a new
language
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. The question is, living in a
country
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 that speaks a different
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 from your
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language
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 is not a serious problem. In my opinion, I do not think that living in a foreign
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 is a challenge even if you are not able to speak their
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. In
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 essay, I am going to introduce the main ideas and give my opinion. First of all, there are many people who have learnt a new
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couse
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because
 living overseas. Learning a new
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 is not difficult, you do not need to know the whole knowledge of the new
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, you should know the basics that help you to communicate with the new
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.
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, the indian
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 always live in a foreign
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 because they think their
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 is
unliveable
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,
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 they do not face difficulty in learning a new
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.
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, the countries that have a huge economy
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 have a perfect environment. They speak English
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Language
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,
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, Learning English or any other
language
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 than you speak helps you to expand your society and
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 a new
community
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, especially
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 the countries that have a small population.
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, there is a
country
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 that has only twenty
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million
 population
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therefore
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, they had better learn a new
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 to discover a new
community
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. In conclusion, I would argue that living in a
country
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 that speaks a different
language
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 than you speak is not a serious problem. Kim Riu

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Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion and outlines the main points you will discuss.
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Use linking words like 'firstly', 'on the other hand', and 'in conclusion' to help your ideas flow better.
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Try to give more examples and explain them more clearly to support your points.
coherence and cohesion
Your opinion is clear and you have attempted to structure your essay.
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You used some examples to support your points, which is a good practice.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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