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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts illustrate the
percentage
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 of
households
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 that owned an electrical device (washing machine, refrigerator, vacuum cleaner) and the amount of time spent on doing chores per week per household in a country from 1920 to 2019.
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,
although
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 ownership of electrical appliances increased over the period, the amount of time spent on housework decreased.
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, washing machines had the highest ownership at the beginning, but by the end of the period, they had the lowest
percentage
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 among the three appliances In 1920, no household owned a refrigerator.
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, by 1940, the
percentage
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 of
households
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 with refrigerators had exceeded those with the other two electrical appliances, rising sharply to 100% in 1980 before plateauing over the next 40 years. In 1920, 30% of
households
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 owned a vacuum cleaner, mirroring the trend of refrigerators and reaching its peak at 100% in 2000 before remaining unchanged for the next 20 years. Washing machines were the most common electrical device in 1920, with 40%. Their
percentage
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 grew steadily, and by
2019
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2019,
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 about 80% of
households
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 owned a washing machine. The average number of
hours
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 spent on housework per week per household declined significantly from 50
hours
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 to around 20
hours
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 in 1960, and
then
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 declined more gradually to about 10
hours
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 in 2019.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, households, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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