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The chart shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

The chart shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
The chart shows the
percentage
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 of
households
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 in owned and rented
accommodation
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 in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. The bar chart illustrates the
percentage
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 of
households
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 in owned and rented
accommodation
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 in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011. In general, the proportion of
household
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households
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 living in rented
accommodation
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 decreased significantly over the period
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while
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, while
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 in owned
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home
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homes
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 rose. In 1971 , both figures were equal and after that
owning
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, owning
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 became more common than renting. In 1918, the majority of
households
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 lived in rented
accommodation
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around
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, around
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 78
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percent
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per cent
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,
while
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 only about 23
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percent
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 owned.
This
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 trend remained relatively stable in 1939 and 1953.
However
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, starting from 1961, the proportion of
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home owners
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homeowners
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 began to rise steadily. In 1971, the
percentage
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 of
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home owning
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homeowners
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 and
renting homes
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renters
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 was equal, both standing at about 50
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percent
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per cent
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. After 1971,
home
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 ownership continued to increase significantly, reaching its peak at approximately 69
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2001. Meanwhile, the
percentage
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 of rented
households
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 dropped steadily to just over 30
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percent
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per cent
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.
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, in 2001, the rate of
home
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 ownership declined slightly to around 64
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percent
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per cent
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,
while
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 renting experienced a small increase to about 36
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per cent
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, households, accommodation, home, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • tenancy
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • proportion
  • residence
  • dwelling
  • shift
  • transition
  • migration
  • fluctuate
  • stabilize
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
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