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Is it better to live in a countryside or in a city? Explain your reasons and give examples

Feeling happy does not depend on where we live, whether in
metropolis
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a metropolis
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 or
village
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a village
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. Some
people
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 prefer living in
metropolis
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a metropolis
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 and
the
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apply
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others find
village
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a village
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better
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a better
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choise
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choice
. About me, living in the
city
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 is more active and full of energy.
This
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 is
due to
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 the fact that the development is very
speed
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speedy
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 there. There are many facilities
such
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 as education buildings, where
student
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students
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 learn and develop themselves to get
a
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apply
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suitable work.
In addition
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, there are many kinds of transportation that make life easy and
effect
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effective
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. In the
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city
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city,
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 we can find entertainment places full of
people
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 who find
interesting
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it interesting
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 and fun. Studies in US
university
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universities
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is said
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show
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 that there is
increase
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an increase
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 in the
number of populations
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population
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 in
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city
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the city
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 between 2009 and 2012
and
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, and
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 that
number
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this increase
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increases
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is
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because of
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due to
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 the
raise
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rise
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 in the number of companies
,
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apply
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 and the need
of
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for
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 work.
In
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On
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 the other hand, we don’t find
variety
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a variety
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 of education
center
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centres
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 in
countryside
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the countryside
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,
that
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which
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make
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makes
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 student leave their places
to
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for
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city
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the city
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. But
people
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 who live in
countryside
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the countryside
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 have a chance to make their life healthy and calm, far away from traffic and pollution. Most
of
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apply
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people
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 find
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the interesting
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interesting outdoors
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outdoors interesting
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 between animals and hills. Studies
are referred
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have shown
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to
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apply
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that
people
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 who spend one hour watching
blue
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the blue
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 sky and green
field
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fields
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becoming
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become
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 more
affective
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effective
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 and
able
Verb problem
are able
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 to solve problems. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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 we can say that living in
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city
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a city
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 makes life easy
and
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, and
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 we
always can
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can always
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 see the development everywhere we go.
Whereas
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 living in
countryside
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the countryside
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is
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has
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 benefits for
who
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those who
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 need to get away from the big
city
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.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction. This will help the reader understand your position right away.
coherence and cohesion
Use more linking words to help your essay flow better. This will make it easier to read and understand.
task achievement
Try to provide clearer examples to support your points. For instance, explain how the education facilities in the city are better with specific examples or details.
task achievement
You presented both sides of the argument, which is great for showing different perspectives.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion summarizes your points well, which is an important part of essay writing.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tranquil
  • serenity
  • bustling
  • amenities
  • prospects
  • healthier lifestyle
  • employment opportunities
  • cultural experiences
  • educational institutions
  • noise pollution
  • cost of living
  • crowded
  • infrastructure
  • urban sprawl
  • communal ties
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