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The chart illustrates how annual salaries of certain professionals were changing over the course of 15 years, in thousands of dollars Summarize the given information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart illustrates how annual salaries of certain professionals were changing over the course of 15 years, in thousands of dollars Summarize the given information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The line graph
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illustrates
 the annual salaries of five professionals in thousands of
dollers
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dollars
 from
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the begining
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begining
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beginning
 of the
21th
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21st
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 century to 2015.
Overall
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, the highest
earning
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earnings
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 can be shown in the data scientists, followed by computer
enginners
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engineers
,
while
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 the
softwere
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software
 engineers
has
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have
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lowest
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the lowest
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incomme
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income
, which increased after
a
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the
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 first decade.
Firstly
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, the highest annual salaries by data scientist
which
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, which
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 is above 75
thousands
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thousand
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of
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apply
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dollars
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in
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at
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 the start of
period
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the period
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,
then
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was
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apply
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continously
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continuously
grow
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grew
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 and reached
at
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apply
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around 215 thousand
dollars
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 in 2011 and
then
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stay
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stayed
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 steady
utill
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until
end
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the end
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 of the period.
Moreover
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, the computer
enginners
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engineers
having
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had
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 around 45 thousand
dollars
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 in 2001, and after
increased
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increasing
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 till 2007 and
reached
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reaching
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approx
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approximately
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 100 thousand,
then
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 stayed constant for five years,
then
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 climbed again and completed at around 20k
dollars
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 in 2015.
Lastly
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, the
softwere
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software
 engineers
has
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had
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 low and steady income till 2011 at 50k
dollars
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,
then
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raised
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rose
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 significantly and reached
top
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the top
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 at
end
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the end
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 at just above 225k in one and
half
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a half
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 decades.
Furthermore
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, the mechanical and civil
enginners
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engineers
 had
a
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apply
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high salaries
in
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at
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start
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the start
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 of the period,
while
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 they finished
at
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with
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low
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a low
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 income
with
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of
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 75k and around 105k in fifteen years.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars, k with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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