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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
The given line charts illustrate the changes in the proportion of households that owned electrical
appliances
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 and the amount of time spent for doing
housework
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 per week in one country between 1920 and 2019. The ownership of
appliances
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 is measured in percentage,
while
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 the time spent on
housework
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 is measured in hours per week.
Overall
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, it can clearly be seen that all electrical
appliances
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 saw a significant increase in household ownership, with the exception of the washing machine, which experienced a gradual increase. Meanwhile, the number of hours spent on
housework
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 per week declined substantially over the same
period
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. In terms of electrical
appliances
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, the washing machine had the highest ownership rate at the beginning of the
period
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, standing at exactly 40
percent
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per cent
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 in 1920. In the following 40 years, it increased significantly by 30. It
then
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 experienced a slight fall to around 65 in 1980 before increasing again to about 75 by the end of the
period
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. Regarding the other two electrical
appliances
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, in 1920, the refrigerator and vacuum cleaner stood at 0 and 30, respectively. The refrigerator had grown dramatically and had surpassed the washing machine to
at
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70 in 1960. It
then
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 increased significantly by
30
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30%
 in 2000.
Similarly
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, the vacuum cleaner climbed dramatically to 100 in 1980. Both
vacuum
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the vacuum
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 cleaner and
refrigerator
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the refrigerator
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 remained stable until the end of the
period
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, standing at 100.
In contrast
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, the total hours spent on
housework
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 fell significantly from 50 in 1920 to 10 in 2019, marking the lowest time spent over the
period
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 87%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words appliances, housework, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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