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The graph below gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries.

The graph below gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries.
The
shown line chart
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 shows clothing
exports
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 in Myanmar, Japan, and Colombia over a period of 5 years between 1999 and 2003. As the graph shows, the clothing
exports
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 in Colombia were highest,
then
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this
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 data in Japan. The clothing
exports
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 in Myanmar were the lowest. As is shown by the chart, during the period from 1999 to
2002
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2002,
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 the clothing
exports
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 in Colombia grew gradually from 480 to approximately 700
millions
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million
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of
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dollars,
then
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 fell slightly in the following year. In terms of
the
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clothing
exports
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 in Japan decreased significantly from 580 ( millions ) to 540
million
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 units. There was increased considerable increase in the clothing
exports
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 between 2000 and 2001 from 540 to approximately 600
million
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of
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dollars, before
go
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 down in the following years. From 1999 to 2001, the clothing
exports
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 in Myanmar jumped quickly from 10 to over 900
million
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 units,
then
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this
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 data dropped significantly in the following year. Regarding, there was an increase
slightly
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between 2002 and 2000 from 340 (millions) to over 400
million
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 units.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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