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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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 chart depicts the changes
of
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in
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cases
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took
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that took
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 place in three distinct areas of
case
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crime
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,
burglary
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, car theft and robbery, in Newport city centre during the decade. In general,
it is clear that
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 the
crime
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 of
the
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apply
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burglary
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 had
the
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a
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 considerable decline during the decade. For the robbery,
this
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 type of
crime
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it
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is
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 always
be
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apply
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the
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apply
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less common and it
had
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has
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 the slightest fluctuation. In detail, at the beginning, the
burglary
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 was the most common type of
crime
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, which almost reached 3400
cases
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 per year in 2003.
Then
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 between 2004 to 2008, it experienced the
consistant delcline
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consistent decline
, and the
cases
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drop
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dropped
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 to 1200
cases
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 per year.
the
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In the
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 following years
the
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, the
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crime
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 rate fluctuates about
this
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 level.
In contrast
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, the car theft rate went
throng
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through
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three
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a
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years
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three-year
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 decrease,
then
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 it started to climb, and its
cases
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 exceeded
burglary
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 in 2007, and it
keeps
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kept
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 the highest
crime
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 rate till 2012. During the ten years,the robbery did not
have
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undergo
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 a dramatic change. In 2002, it took place about 700 times, which is almost equal to 2012.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cases, burglary, crime with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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