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The chart below shows the waste disposal in one European Country in four years 2005, 2006, 2007, and 2008

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The chart below shows the waste disposal in one European Country in four years 2005, 2006, 2007, and 2008
The given bar chart illustrates the amount of garbage disposal by three methods
as
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, namely
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 landfill, burning and dumping at sea
in
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, in
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 one European country over the period of 4 years from 2005 to 2008.
Overall
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, the number of litter has a clear difference between methods. Specifically, landfill was the most common solution at the beginning of the period
before
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, before
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 it fell substantially over time.
On the other hand
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, burning has slightly
increasing
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increased,
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 even
it
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though it
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become
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became
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 the most common way
to
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of
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 waste treatment in 2008.
Besides
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, dumping at sea
maintain
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maintains
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 stability
in
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for
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 three years,
then
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 it slowed decrease in the final year. In 2005,
landfill
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landfills
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 had the highest waste disposal at the begin about 1800
million
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tonnes
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 .
However
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 ,
this
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 figure decreased significantly to around 600
million
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tonnes
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 in 2008. As for dumping at sea, the figure was relatively unchanged. It stood at 600
million
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tonnes
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 from 2005 to 2007
,
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;
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 after that
there
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, there
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 was a slight decline to about 580
million
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tonnes
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 in 2008. Meanwhile, a level of garbage treated by burning showed the opposite trend. It
growth
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grew
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 steadily from 500
million
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tonnes
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 in 2005 to approximately 800
million
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tonnes
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 in 2007.
In
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At
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 the end of
period
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the period
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, burning has become the most popular disposal approach, accounting for nearly 900
million
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tonnes
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 in the final year.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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