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The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison. L s where relevan

The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison. L s where relevan
The bar chart provides key information about the proportion of social media users in both genders, in Canada, in the period 2014 and 2015. The Units are measured by
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percentages
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, the one site purchases remained
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 highest level over the
two
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 sites and above
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have
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 increased gradually.
In contrast
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, the ones who
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 one app or no apps any more decreased the next year.
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periods,
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 the
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apply
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 are approximately the same amount.
According to
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 what is shown, there
was been
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remained in
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the toprank
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toprank
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top rank
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users
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user
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of
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in
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 both years.
those
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Those
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 who
use
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 five apps
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are 2
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%
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;
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moreover,
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 it doubled the next year.
the
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apply
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 increased slightly in the
last
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 year
with
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by
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 3%.
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,
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applications
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do
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been
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show
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 a significant change
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, only
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As well as
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apply
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 those who do not
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 any sites. The three app purchasers
,
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apply
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displays
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display
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slight
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a slight
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, exactally
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exactly
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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