The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.
The line chart showed the energy consumption in the USA from 1980 to 2008 and the projections until 2030. Petrol and Oil
dominanted
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dominated
the energy use at the
begining
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beginning
at 35
quadrillion
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units
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in 1980 and will keep the leading part until 2030. Coal and Natural Gas ranked
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second and third at about 16
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and 20
quadrillion
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units
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in
1980
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1980,
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respectively.
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nuclear, solar/wind and hydropower made up the least portion at about 4
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and will just grow slightly in the future. From 1980 to 1985, the Petrol and Oil consumption dropped from 35 to about 31
quadrillion
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,
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the same trend as natural gas in
this
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period.
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, coal, nuclear, solar/wind and hydropower experienced a subtle increase.
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, after 1985, petrol and oil and coal had a rise and will
be
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continue
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kept
jumping
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rise
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up to 2030.
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the other kinds of energy consumption, natural gas, nuclear, solar/wind and hydropower, climbed up slightly and might be
stagnent
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stagnating
in the future as
forcasted
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forecasted
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words quadrillion, units with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Renewable resources
  • Non-renewable resources
  • Fossil fuels
  • Nuclear power
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Biomass
  • Consumption patterns
  • Technological advancements
  • Energy efficiency
  • Sustainable development
  • Carbon footprint
  • Energy policy
  • Projections
  • Decade
  • Significant shifts
  • Economic factors
  • Environmental impact
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