The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.
The graph illustrates information
that
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the energy
in
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consumed in
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the USA
consumed
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apply
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since
1980
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1980,
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with
projection
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until 2030. The trends of nuclear, solar/wind and
hydropower
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were similar
from1980
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from 1980
to
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apply
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2030.The tendencies of coal and natural
gas
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were resemble in the period given. At the same time , petrol and oil
kept
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accounted for
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the largest
number
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amount
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in
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these six different kinds of energy. From 1980 to 1985, the trend of petrol and oil started from 35 and decreased to about 30,which still kept the biggest
amount
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. Natural
gas
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quadrillion units declined from 20 to 17
and
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that of coal began increasing slightly from about 16 at the same time . In 1985,the
amount
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of coal and natural
gas
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was
same
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the same
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(17). Not only nuclear but solar/wind and
hydropower
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owned the same trendies from 4 to 5. After that, the
amount
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of petrol and oil kept growing to about 45
and
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, and
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it may continue growing in
next
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the next
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5 years . The number of coal and natural
gas
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had
the
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a
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similar trend from 1985 to 2015. After that ,natural
gas
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stopped growing
and
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coal kept increasing between 2015 and 2030. The trends of
nuclear
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nuclear,
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solar/wind
and
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, and
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hydropower
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were similar . At
last
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,
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amount
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the amount
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of nuclear will be the largest(8)
and
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, and
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that of solar may be bigger than that of
hydropower
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Add more linking words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hydropower, gas, amount with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Renewable resources
  • Non-renewable resources
  • Fossil fuels
  • Nuclear power
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Biomass
  • Consumption patterns
  • Technological advancements
  • Energy efficiency
  • Sustainable development
  • Carbon footprint
  • Energy policy
  • Projections
  • Decade
  • Significant shifts
  • Economic factors
  • Environmental impact
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