Some people say that hospitals should spend more money on buying technology devices, others argue more money should be spent on having more doctors and nurses. Discuss both theses views and give your own opinion.

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individuals think that hospitals should

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prioritise

their

spendings

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on advanced devices,

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others believe that it is much better to spend on medical

stuff

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equipment

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essay would argue that

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owing

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high-quality gadgets in clinics will help doctors with difficult operations, I believe that having well-educated doctors and nurses will have a greater effect on the

safy

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safety

of patients.

elmas.m.amra

Jul 27, 2025

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coherence and cohesion

Make sure to clearly introduce both sides of the argument before stating your opinion. This will help organize your essay better.

task achievement

Use more example or specific cases to support your points about doctors and technology to strengthen your arguments.

coherence and cohesion

Check spelling, like 'safy' should be 'safety' and 'proritize' should be 'prioritize'.

task achievement

The essay clearly states your opinion in the introduction, which is good for clarity.

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The discussion of the importance of both technology and medical staff shows understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Linking words
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

60 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

diagnostic accuracy
treatment outcomes
MRI scanners
robotic surgical systems
administrative processes
patient records management
human error
patient care
backbone of the healthcare system
empathy
critical thinking
patient-to-staff ratios
personalized care
patient satisfaction
workforce
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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