This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.

This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the percentage of four selected materials between 1982 and 2010.
Overall
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,
Alumininium
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aluminium
cans and glass containers witnessed a noticeable
rose
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rise
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, unlike plastics that remained at the same rate. Paper and cardboard
is
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are
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the highest
material
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materials
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to be recycled. Two different materials
increased
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have increased
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sharply
in
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apply
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over 30
years
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. Even though glass containers dropped to about 40% in 1990,
such
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material was able to climb afterwards and reach around 60% in 2010, maintaining its second ranking.
Although
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recylcing alumininium
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recycling aluminium
cans did not begin in 1982, it was able to secure a place on the chart in 1986 with just less than 5%, followed by
dramatic
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a dramatic
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increase in the next 20
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years
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years,
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where it was able to reach approximately less than half the total recycled material. Maintaining its position as the top recycled material, paper and cardboard's recycling rates
undergone
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have undergone
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slight fluctuation. Between 1982 and 1990, papers stood at around 65% proportion. Soon after that,
this
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material recycling percentage picked up to 80% in 1994, and declined by about 10% in the next 15
years
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.
Finally
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, recycling plastics has always been the lowest material to be
recyled
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recycled
with less than 5% in the first
years
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, and lower than 10% in 2010.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • increased
  • paper and cardboard
  • plastic
  • glass
  • metal
  • significant increase
  • relatively stable
  • fluctuating
  • period
  • starting
  • reaching
  • gradually increasing
  • remained low
  • experienced
  • showed
  • greatest
  • proportion
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