In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday.Do you agree or disagree?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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I will explain why I disagree with
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statement that in the future, more People will not travel abroad on holiday and
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choose to stay in their own country. One reason is
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believe
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abroad can be a fort way of getting familiar with a new world. When we trad a new country, we have
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experiment
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to experiment
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various
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with various
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cultures
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including
their food style, their costumes and probably their mindset.
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travelled
in France For Three
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and it caused
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learn better about their culture that
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was not in any book or website, because of my own experience. Another reason is
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is argued that
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abroad as a new experience is important for
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mindset.
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by
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abroad we learn about
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a culture and we can have
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apply
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better
behavior
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with these
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persons in our country. In
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I think
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an overseas
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Trip on holiday in the
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is
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a choise
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choise
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choice
of many Pep le as always.

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task response
Your introduction clearly states your disagreement, but try to make it clearer. Summarize your main points at the end of the introduction.
coherence
Your paragraphs need better linking words to connect ideas. Use words like 'firstly,' 'also,' and 'in conclusion.'
task response
You provided personal experiences which make your essay more engaging.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestic tourism
  • international travel
  • cultural exchange
  • national pride
  • affordability
  • convenience
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • local businesses
  • comfort zone
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