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The bar chart shows the number of times per week (in 1000s), over five weeks, that three computer packages were downloaded from the internet. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of times per week (in 1000s), over five weeks, that three computer packages were downloaded from the internet. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar
char
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chart
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 displays the number of times for a
sevan
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seven-day
days
Check wording
period
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 over
Use synonyms
time of
Replace the word
a five-week
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 period five weeks that three
website
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websites
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being
Verb problem
are being
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 uploaded
in
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to
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 a device.
Overall
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,
generally
Correct word order
apply
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 the ActiveX package
Correct word order
generally reach
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reach
Correct subject-verb agreement
reaches
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 a highest of
the
Correct article usage
apply
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time
Use synonyms
 to download
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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.
Additionally
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,the Net program
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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 the minimum
time
Use synonyms
 of period to download it.
Firstly
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,ActiveX dramatically climbed over the
time
Use synonyms
 of five weeks
Linking Words
initially
Punctuation problem
, initially
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grow
Wrong verb form
growing
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 approximately from 65 to 121.
Furthermore
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,Java
also
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 rapidly increased
around
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from around
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 42 to 81.
Moreover
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,
Net
Correct article usage
the Net
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 webpage is the lowest online platform,
according to
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 static
it
Punctuation problem
, it
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 is a fluctuating pattern
,
Punctuation problem
.
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Nevertheless
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, it initiated almost
of
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apply
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38 to 45 of downloaded platforms.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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