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Even after the Covid-19 pandemic is over, some companies are thinking of using a hybrid approach when it comes to working from home and on-site. What are the advantages and disadvantages of working on-site?

There is some argument about working from
home
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 and
on-site
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on-site,
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 even though
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the COVID-19
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 pandemic
had been
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has
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 decreased .
This
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 essay will provide an opinion about
advantages
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages of working from
home
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 and on-site. Working from
home
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 is the method many
companies
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 used during the
COVID 19
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COVID-19
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 pandemic to
make
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keep
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 their businesses running. The advantages of working from
home
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have so
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include
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 many issues.
First,
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we don'
t
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 have to travel to
work
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,
it
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which
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 helps us
safe
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 money and our environment.
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, some people have to get to
work
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 by bus or BTS
which
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, which
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sometimes are
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are sometimes
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 crowded
and
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, and
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 we have to wait for them to arrive.
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, sometimes they
aren'
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don't
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t
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 arrive on
time
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.
Second,
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it can save us more
time
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 to do anything we want and
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we
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can
work
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any
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at any
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time
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 we want.
For instance
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,
You
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you
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 can start to
work
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 within 5 minutes after you
woke
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wake
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 up if you want to
or
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, or
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 you can do some chores or exercise right after you finish your
work
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. In terms of disadvantages, working at
home
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 might distract us from working because there are no
strictly
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 rules .
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, some people might play some video games and may not give attention to
work
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 as much as working at the company
or
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, or
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 if there are pets at
home
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, pets would come to play with us and
make
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distract
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 us no concentration at
work
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.
Although
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,
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apply
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 we usually
work
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 on-site before the pandemic but after that some
companies
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still
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are still
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 using hybrid methods to
work
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. So working on-site
also
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have
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has
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 some advantages and disadvantages. Working on-site
help
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helps
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 us concentrate on working because some
companies
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 may have rules
such
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 as mobile phone inhibition during
work
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 or no chatting. We can make a
comminication
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communication
 with colleagues and
don'
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avoid
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t
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 get
misunderstanding
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misunderstandings
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 between each other because seeing eye to eye is mischief
better
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effective
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 than chatting or typing through text. On the
orther
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other
 hand, working on-site might consume our
time
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 and money because we have to get to
work
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 by car, taxi, bus or BTS. We must
experienced
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have experienced
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 traffic
jam
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jams
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 in some places before getting to
work
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.
Fees
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The fees
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of
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for
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 transportation or oil are expensive nowadays. Working from
home
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 or working on-site
are
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apply
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all have pros and cons. It depends on your
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companies
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company
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 whether to
work
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 from
home
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 or on-site regarding
from
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apply
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benefits and effectiveness. No matter what approach, we all have to do our best to
work
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 if we don'
t
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 want to lose our jobs.

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coherence and cohesion
Your essay presents an opinion, but it lacks a clear structure. Make sure each paragraph has a main idea and supports it well. Start each paragraph with a topic sentence to make your points clearer.
task achievement
You need to provide more specific examples to support your ideas. While you mention several advantages and disadvantages, including more details or specific situations would make your arguments stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Try to avoid spelling mistakes and grammatical errors. Review your work to correct these issues, as they can affect the readability of your essay.
task achievement
You identified important advantages and disadvantages of working on-site effectively.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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