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The graph below shows the average house prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014.

The graph below shows the average house prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014.
The presented line graph compares the
prices
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 of houses in three countries from 1997 to
2014
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2014,
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 with
prices
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 that are given in thousands
dollars
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of dollars
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.
Overall
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, the
prices
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 of houses in
country
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 A
has
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have
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 increased dramatically
with
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, with
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 some falls in periods
even
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, even
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 though it was the highest
price
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 tag among countries. Turning to
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country
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countries
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B
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 and C, the
prices
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 followed behind with consecutive
price
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 tags, which are
country
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B
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 and C, with respective
prices
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 of 500 and 250
at the end
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 of the period. Specifically,
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country
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countries
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 A and
B
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 shared
similar
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a similar
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 standing until 2002, from where the accommodation
prices
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 of
country
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 A had skyrocketed, culminating in 2004 with 500,
while
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 it was about 280 in
country
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B
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 in that year. It was not until 2008
,
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apply
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from
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that
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when
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apply
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the
prices
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 of both
countries
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countries'
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 housing values started
whooping
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skyrocketing
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, with
country
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B
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 the
price
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 was 500
which
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, which
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 was its peak point and remained until 2014,
while
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country
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 A surged to 750 in 2014. When it comes to
country
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 C, it bucked the trend. Starting at about 175 in 1997, increasing to 250 in 2007. From that on, it plummeted to its previous value of 175 before reaching its peak of 250 in 2013. Ultimately, in 2014, the
price
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 decreased to 250.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, country, price, b with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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