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Inventors are not as important to society as doctors •To what extent do you agree with this statement Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There is the view that
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 do not play an important role in
society
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 as same as
doctors
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.
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 some argue in favour, I oppose
this
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 notion. On the one hand, it is true that
doctors
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 have a direct and immediate impact on people’s lives. They diagnose and treat illnesses, perform surgeries, and save lives on a daily basis. In many cases, without the help of
doctors
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, people would not survive injuries, diseases, or chronic conditions.
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, during the COVID-19 pandemic, millions of
doctors
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 worked tirelessly to help infected patients and reduce the spread of the virus. Their work was essential to keeping societies functioning during a global health crisis.
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,
doctors
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 are rightly seen as heroes in many situations
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 their life-saving role.
On the other hand
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,
inventors
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 contribute to
society
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 in less visible but equally important ways. Their innovations provide the tools and technology that make
doctors
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’ work possible.
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, medical devices
such
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 as X-ray machines, surgical robots, and even basic tools like thermometers were all created by
inventors
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.
In addition
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,
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also
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 help
society
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 beyond the medical field by developing new forms of communication, transportation, and energy. A good example is the invention of smartphones, which not only improve daily life but
also
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 allow
doctors
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 to consult with patients remotely through telemedicine. Without
inventors
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, modern healthcare and many other areas of life would not function as they do today. In conclusion,
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doctors
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 play a crucial role in saving lives,
inventors
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 should not be considered less important. Both professions support
society
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 in different but equally valuable ways.
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, I believe
inventors
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 are just as important as
doctors
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.

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task achievement
Consider expanding some ideas with more examples to support your points better.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use linking words like 'however', 'for example', or 'in addition' to improve the flow of your writing.
task achievement
Your introduction clearly states your position on the topic.
coherence and cohesion
You have provided a good structure with separate paragraphs for each point, making it easy to read.
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