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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The table provides key data about residents of five European countries (Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden, Turkey) spending on different goods in the year 2011.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that Turkey had the highest count of groceries, leisure activities and education in 2011,
while
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 the major figures in clothing and footwear belong to Italy. Looking from a more detailed perspective, the percentage of Irish expenditures on food, beverages and tobacco was roughly 4% lower than 32.14% of Turkish, and
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 ranked second.
Whereas
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 the average index of Italian, Spanish and Swedish citizens' expenses on
meal
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meals
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 was approximately 17%.
Moreover
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, almost identical rates in three countries can
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also
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 traced in clothing and shoes expenditures, with the numbers of Ireland, Spain and Turkey varying within 6%.
In contrast
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 to Italy, Turkish people were observed as those spending
least
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the least
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 on clothing and footwear, reaching only 5.4% It is worth noting
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 that the unattractive things in all 5 countries were entertainment and education, and the lowest position of them was occupied by Spanish individuals (1.98%).
Besides
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 being similar in the category of food and drinks, both Italy and Sweden demonstrated 3% in
Leisure
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the Leisure
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/Education sector.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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