The graph below shows the total value of exports and the value of fuel, food and manufactured goods exported by one country from 2000 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the total value of exports and the value of fuel, food and manufactured goods exported by one country from 2000 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows the total value of exports and the value of fuel, food and manufactured goods exported by one country from 2000 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graphs illustrate two categories
including
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, including
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value
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the value
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of
fuel
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exports
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and chosen
exports
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between
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, between
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2000 and 2005. It is evident that
value
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the value
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of
fuel
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exports
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have
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has
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no consistent pattern.
In addition
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, three sectors show more variation. One of the most striking features is that the value of
fuel
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exports
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does not have
clear
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a clear
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direction
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directional
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pattern.
This
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declined 50,000
millon
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million
dollars from 2000(300,000) to 2002(250,000). After that, the trend was reversed
,
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;
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it changed direction from
down
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the down
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band to
upper
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the upper
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band. In 2002, it started with 250,000 million and it showed sharp growth with 350,000 in 2003. In fact, between 2003 and
2005
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2005,
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maintained
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it continued
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to grow steadily. Obviously,
fuel
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had the largest figures until around 2004.
This
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decreased steadily,
which started
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starting from
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approximately 46,000 in 2000.
Finally
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, it ended
20,000
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at 20,000
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in 2005. In 2005, manufactured goods had the upper band among others, at
near
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nearly
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22,000. Specifically, manufactured goods had no consistent growth, which changed
the
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apply
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direction twice.
Finally
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, food had the lowest between 2000 and 2005.
This
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did not have notable changes, which ranged from approximately 1,500 and 2,200.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words fuel, exports with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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