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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

In the background of
technology
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development
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,our ways of communicating with others have varied a lot, leading to several changes
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 the people's types of relationships,which
have
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 become a positive
development
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. Talking
to
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 relationships people make,there are two
aspeacts
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aspects
 that
technology
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affected
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.The first one is the speed of transferring the information,which is achieved by
the
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electronic communication.It's actually a big project to send a message to the other through
phsical
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physical
 transferring,
such
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 as the
hourse
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horse
 ride,the carrier pigeon,which may spend even a year to arrive
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.
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Contrary
 to them,the social platforms like Wechat,Facebook
showing
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shown
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 up in the past decades reduced the
long
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time on the way from
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 to
second-long
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seconds
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. The second one is the
broden
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broader
 social areas.
Technology
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 of social
paltform
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platform
 breaks down the boundaries
along
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among
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 people,which
are
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 actually
determined
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a determined
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 problem to deal with.Detailed ,
overall
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 information
of
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 us which are put on the social app
just
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, just
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 like QQ,
MOMO
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serve
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provides
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 clear
accesses
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access
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 for
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other aiming to know about
ourselves
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us
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,jumping out of the
neccesarry
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necessary
 duration of exploring a complex person.A couple of friends can be made in
few
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a few
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 minutes by talking or just checking self-information online,which is hundreds
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of time
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time
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times
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 quicker than before. In my opinion,the
apperence
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appearance
 of social
communicating
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communication
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technology
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 is
positive
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a positive
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development
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 without any
doubt.No
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doubt
 matter the increase
of
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 speed of
transfering
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transferring
 information or
broden
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broadening
 social areas,they are both dramatic
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development
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developments
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 of human society's efficiency.Time-cost social activities are solved well by new
technology
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,which would lead to the progress of
whole
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the whole
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 work of society.

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planning
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structure
Use clear linking to show how ideas connect. Simple words like and, but, so can help.
language
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examples
Give more real life examples to back your point.
conclusion
End with a short sentence that restates your view.
strength
The view is clear that technology changes how we talk with others.
strength
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology
  • interact
  • relationships
  • connectivity
  • communication
  • online
  • face-to-face
  • friendships
  • romantic relationships
  • family dynamics
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
  • effects
  • formation
  • ease
  • impacts
  • communities
  • connect
  • interaction
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