There is a growing
of
moving from rural
to urban
. I believe that
happens because of the need to find a better
to live.
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of
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will eventually trigger an increase
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of living
high pollution around the
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will affect
’s quality of
.
Many opt to
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from rural
to urban
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in order to search for better jobs. In the
, there are a lot of
vacancies available, particularly for various academic backgrounds
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to those provided in the village.
, an IT expert usually will look for a
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where the main office
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in the
.
, a unicorn startup in Indonesia, namely Gojek, has
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headquarters in Jakarta
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that the opportunities lie everywhere, mostly in town. Meanwhile, opportunities in urban
are most likely limited and tend to circulate only in agriculture and forestry, which are not related to most vacancies searched by the graduates.
A high and regular
of citizens moving to the
will eventually cause some issues.
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a high demand for property because each individual needs a place to live.
, the price to rent or even buy a house would become higher and
make a noticeable
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in the cost of living in that particular
.
will make
cannot afford a better
in the
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when they already
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than in
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smaller town.
, dense population
leads to the possibility of highly polluted air.
pollution may appear
the significant use of transportation. In Jakarta, the
of private transportation used by the
is very high
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person has
motorcycle
family has
car, which they use regularly to go to the office.
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of the
in the world with very poor air
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,
decreasing the quality of
there.
In conclusion,
many
have the right to search for a better living by finding a new
, a very significant
of
moving to the
would create some major drawbacks,
as high cost of living and pollution
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the
.
, the government should
consider the best way to overcome the
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given that
are hoping for a better
.