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Some people want governments to spend money looking for life on other planets. Others, however, think this is a waste of public money when there are so many problems on earth. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience. examine my answer Please write in English language.

There is an
onngoing
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ongoing
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wheather
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whether
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 should spend taxpayer money on space exploration or use the funds to solve the
problem
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problems
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 that are
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necessity
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in
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the
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earth
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Earth
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 for the
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 betterment .
This
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, many people believe investing in science research will give
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a
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 option to explore other
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planets
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,
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 that we can
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 several empowerment stuff.
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, the latest update about weather forecasting
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 it may help us to
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with
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the
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natural disasters.
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, going to other
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planets
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 can improve
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technology
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for instance
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, technology developed through space
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programs
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 often
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 life
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earth
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as a
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result
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 it can
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 a strong supportive communication system. I disagree with the statement.
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, numerous
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 believe public funds should be
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 in the ongoing problems like
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 infrastructure, healthcare, and education.
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, basic
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necessity
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 should be
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instead
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 of investing in
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futuristic things. Basic
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necessity
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necessities
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 like
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 roads can be improved so that people do not suffer with an extraneous traffic.
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,
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the government
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 can make education
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accessible
 for every person in the country so that poverty can be eliminated. In conclusion, many of
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mankind argued government should invest in
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space, but I believe fulfilling basic
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necessity
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 should be the main motive of the authority rather than thinking years ahead.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction.
coherence cohesion
Use clear topic sentences to start each paragraph to guide the reader.
language
Check for spelling and grammar errors, such as 'ongoing' and 'whether'.
coherence cohesion
Use more linking words such as 'however', 'for example', and 'in conclusion' to connect ideas better.
task achievement
The essay presents both views, which is a good approach for a discussion essay.
task achievement
Relevant examples were included to support the points made.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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