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Band 6

Some people think news has no connection to people’s lives. So then it is a waste of time to read the newspaper and watch television news programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Most humans believe that we can spend more time in school or the work
instead
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 of reading
news
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 in the newspaper or watching programs on television because it is not keeping in touch with life. I completely disagree with
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 opinion. The first reason why I do not agree with the idea of following
news
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 on the web is that
news
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 plays a critical role in keeping individuals aware of current events, both locally and internationally.
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 is a tool to help connect all regions of the country
as well as
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 with other countries in the world, and the
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 is refreshed continuously. Especially, in terms of weather, the notifications help to know the prediction of the path of the
storm
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, the strength of the
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,
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 the
storm
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 damage brought about.
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, the recent Wipha
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 , thanks to the fast
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 updates,
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people have many policies to prevent storms in time. Another reason is that
news
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 continues to influence our lives in several ways, especially in enhancing our ability to make sensible decisions. There are many fake goods on the market, so we need to regularly update
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 to prevent
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. Recently, there has been a notice of finding a line of fake milk production to brings negative effects on consumers' health, especially for young people, young women who are pregnant and especially those who are new. Thanks to the official sources of information, we can choose safe products In conclusion, I totally disagree with the idea that
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 is not related to life and should not be spent on it

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea, and that it relates back to your overall argument about the importance of news.
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Try to use a wider range of ideas and examples to support your opinion.
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You have a clear opinion stated in your introduction.
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Your points about the impact of news on safety and decision-making are relevant and meaningful.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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