Everyone should adopt a vegetarian diet because eating meat can cause serious health problems. Do you agree or disagree?

People think everyone should eat non-dairy-based products
due to
the health issues caused by consuming dairy. There is a scientific explanation for
this
statement and I strongly disagree with that prohibition. Not only does that affect the surroundings, but
also
affects people’s economy. Suggesting the population only eat a diet rather than consume animals was not a good solution as that would limit the amount of vegetables in nature. That suggestion will only lead to a reduction amount of plants in the wildlife because most of them are consumed by humans. The limited amount of crops in nature will danger animals that feed them as their consumption is gone.
This
will lead to
habitat
disruption as the symbiote in nature is
also
disrupted, destroying the
habitat
as the final consequence.
For example
, There is an accident in Indonesia where some crops fail to grow
due to
weather conditions. Evidence shows that the number of its consumers like mice, is reduced. The small number of mice
also
reduces the number of its surrounding predators
such
as eagles. The eagle reduction will
also
affect other creatures and will eventually endanger its surrounding
habitat
. Making the population only consume plant-based cuisine will directly affect the people’s economy That cuisine
also
has the same ingredients,
hence
the request for them is increasing.
Moreover
, increasing demand for that will end up creating an over-demand situation where that situation is making the plant ingredients rise and affecting the citizen’s expenditure. A similar situation
also
can be found if there is a vegan trend in societies. That trend leads to the rising demand for plant ingredients and affects product prices. The rising price of the stock does not help to reduce consumer expenditure. The increasing expenditure will affect their economy. In short, I disagree with the suggestion as that could harm the
habitat
. It
also
could stack up families' expenditures for their consumable items
hence
affecting their recession.
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