Despite better access to education, many adults today still cannot read or write. In what ways are they disadvantaged? What can governments do to help them?

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nowadays education is wide range popularization, there
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still
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some adults who did not have enough resources to
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receive
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education when they were young
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and can
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not read or write.
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may lead them to a negative situation
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however
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, the government should take some
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. Individuals who
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lack
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reading
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and
write
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ability may have low employment,
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that
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impact
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their daily life. If
people
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do not have
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to read and write, they can not absorb the knowledge. In
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way, they would not have opportunities to attain
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jobs
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decrease
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employment. If those
people
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obtain a job, they can not communicate with their colleagues, like even
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can not write an
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. So they are easily
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pushed out, and difficult to
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in
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society. In order to decline
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phenomenon, allow more adults to develop their
read
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and
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ability,
governments
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should provide support. As
governments
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can provide funds for
people
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to encourage their learning.
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can set up some
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, like online courses
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can stimulate them to learn new knowledge. Only in
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way can
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those adults who do not have
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to go to
schools
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school
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offline to enhance their reading and writing skills.
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governments
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should increase the
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of the importance
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reading and writing, to improve
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understand
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the
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significance. All in all, those
people
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who
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lack
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reading and writing skills would
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of style, and put themselves in a dangerous position.
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, with the help of
governments
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,
this
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situation would be
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.

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Task Achievement
Improve sentence structure and grammar. For example, instead of 'there is still have some adults who did not have enough resources,' it should be 'there are still some adults who did not have enough resources.'
Coherence and Cohesion
Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph to show what the main idea is. This helps the reader follow your argument.
Task Achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points. Instead of saying 'governments can provide funds,' give an example of what this support looks like, such as free classes or workshops.
Task Achievement
The essay addresses the task and identifies the issues faced by adults who cannot read or write.
Task Achievement
The argument about government support is relevant and shows understanding of the topic.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy
  • Underemployment
  • Social isolation
  • Healthcare decisions
  • Autonomy
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Marginalized areas
  • Economic instability
  • Employment opportunities
  • Governmental plans
  • Dependency
  • Community involvement
  • Financial incentives
  • Flexible schedules
  • Mobile applications
  • Workplace literacy programs
  • Literacy education
  • Access to information
  • Social interactions
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