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You have a friend who lives in a different country. You will organise a party soon and have thought to use a foreign recipe. Write a letter to the friend asking for a recipe from his/her country for the party you are organizing. In your letter, tell your friend about the party ask for the recipe explain why you need the recipe from his/her country You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ................,

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Dear Dhruvi, I hope you are doing well and enjoying your summer vacation with your parents. Actually, I am reaching out to you for the recipe
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 the Chipotle Bowl. I am planning to invite at least fifteen people
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 my 25th birthday party next month.
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 event in my backyard. As soon as I thought of
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 party, I immediately decided to ask for the Chipotle Bowl which you prepared for me
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 when I visited you the
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 time. Obviously, I have to make
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 for my parents and others to show them, how good of a cook I am, just kidding. As you know
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we Indians enjoy eating spicy and healthy food,
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 I think that
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 bowl will be spot-on for
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 event.
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 but not least, most of my friends and
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 my parents would love to try new cuisine. It’s needless to say
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I
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 you very much and we
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 meet soon. Thank you in advance. Warm regards, Ruchin Patel

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses solely on one main idea to enhance clarity.
task response
Consider adding a little more detail about how you will use the recipe or what it means to you to strengthen your request.
suitable writing tone
The tone of your letter is friendly and inviting, making it very suitable for a personal correspondence.
complete response
You have clearly outlined the purpose of your letter and what you are asking for, which shows clear task achievement.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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