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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Some people think plastic bags should be banned. Others believe they are needed in society today. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some individuals think that
plastic
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bags
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 should be banned
and
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, and
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 others disagree. In order to help the
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environment
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environment,
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 I think it is important to stop using
plastic
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bags
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, because these
plastic
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bags
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 have done damage to the
environment
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 in many different ways. The most dangerous thing about
plastic
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that
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is that
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 it is not able to be recycled. People who think that
plastic
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 is important and we can not replace it are wrong
and
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 they must see the harm that
plastic
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 has done
on
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to
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 the whole world. There are many ways to replace
plastic
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such
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, such
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 as
,
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apply
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 paper
bags
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, which is able to be recycled and
it
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will not damage the
environment
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. The best way to reduce the usage of
plastic
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 is to let
pepole
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people
 know what harm
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apply
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it
do
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does
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.
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, a study showed that 33 per cent of sea species are damaged by the
plastic
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 in many different ways some
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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animals
,
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apply
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or
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and
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 plants even died because of it. And the study
also
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 illustrated that if we
did
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do
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 not take
a
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serious action to stop
plastic
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usage
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usage,
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 our planet will
become dead
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die
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 and we will not be able to live on it. In conclusion,
plastic
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 is harmful
,
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apply
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 because it
is not
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cannot
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 able to be recycled.
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, if we
did
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do
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 not stop or reduce
the
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its
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 usage
of
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it we
will
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apply
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all might
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might all
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be dead
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die
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. Penalties should be imposed on those who still use
plastic
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 in a not
important
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unimportant
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 way. People should become aware of the harm that
plastic
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 does to the
environment
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.

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task achievement
Try to clearly present both sides of the argument in separate paragraphs. Right now, the essay mainly focuses on one side.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure your ideas flow smoothly from one to another. Use linking words like 'firstly,' 'next,' and 'finally' to connect your points better.
general
Check for spelling errors and grammar mistakes, as they distract from your ideas.
task achievement
Your essay presents a clear opinion on the use of plastic bags, which is an important part of task achievement.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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