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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of visitors who stayed
in
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on
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 cruise ships and
stayed
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apply
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on a specific Caribbean
Island
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 from 2010 to 2017. The data is presented in millions of tourists.
Overall
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,
fluctuation
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a fluctuation
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observed
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was observed
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 over the period for people visiting an
island
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.
However
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, the total
number
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for
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of
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 public
visiting
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visitors
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 grew in 2017 compared to 2010.
Firstly
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, the ratio for visitors who preferred staying
in
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on
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 cruise and ships
raised
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rose
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 in 2011
around
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to around
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 half of
million
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; but decreased in later
year
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years
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 and grew steadily after that and
reached
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reaching
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it
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its
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peaked
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peak
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 at 2
million
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.
Moreover
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, the
number
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 of visitors
stayed
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staying
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 on the
island
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 remained
same
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the same
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 in
first
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the first
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 two years; below 1
million
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which
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, which
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 expanded considerably in
2013
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2013,
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 just over 1.8
million
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 and plateaued till 2015.
Additionally
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, the total
number
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 of people visiting the
island
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 rose constantly from
2010
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2010,
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 slightly less than 1.1
million
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to
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, to
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 more than 2.5
million
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 in 2015
and
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, and
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 surprisingly
in
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, in
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 2017 climbed
at
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to
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 3.5
million
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, island, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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