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`Nowadays, a lot of information about medical conditions and illnesses is freely available on the internet. Is this a good thing or a bad thing for most people? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Information
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 about illnesses and medical conditions
now is
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is now
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 freely available on the
internet
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. Many websites or YouTube channels are about
health
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. They are all about medicine. You can easily find
information
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 about every kind of illness that you might have. Some of
this
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information
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 could be fake, and it can be dangerous. In my opinion,
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 is a bad thing for most people, because self-made diagnostics of
health
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 can be very harmful
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 it. I will provide two reasons for it.
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, when we find
information
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 about some kind of illness on the
internet
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, immediately we start to check it by ourselves. Maybe you have the same cure. But we dont know exactly by whom
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information
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 was written. Most of us do not have medical knowledge. That's why it can be harmful
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health
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. Some people become stressed after reading or watching
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information
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. Another reason for visiting professional doctors is that only the traditional way of
medecine
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medicine
 can really find what is wrong with you. Sometimes a headache or pain in your back can be
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 of cancer ,
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. But nobody can recognise cancer using
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 from the
internet
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. You can lose your time checking your
health
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. I think it all always
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 people about
health
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 is good, but you should be careful with what you get from
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internet
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the internet
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. Basically, never trust it
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 after getting it
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 check it with your family doctor. Only doctors know how to help you. All other ways are self-harm, and it is better to have a healthy lifestyle.

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You provide a clear opinion in your introduction, which is important.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a logical structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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