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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular uk school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular uk school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The 3 pie charts depict the varying yearly expenditure of a certain
uk
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 school in three different years.
Overall
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, it is clearly evident that the salaries of teachers took a larger proportion.
Whiles
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 money spent on wages of other workers saw a decline, the opposite is true for how much that went into paying for insurance.
To begin
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 with, tutors' pay was 40% of the whole spending, increasing by 10% in 1991
,
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however
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, there was a decrease of 5% in 2001. Insurance generally had a 6% increase
through out
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 the period.
Renumeration
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 for other employees saw a downward trend from 28%, 22%,
then
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 15% in the respective years of 1981, 1991 and 2001.
On the other hand
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, there were fluctuations in the expenditure on furniture
as well as
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resource
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resources
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 and books. For the former,
it's
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its
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 total cost dropped down to 5% in 1991 as compared to 15% in 1981, but it
later
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 projected to 23%. The latter constituted 15% in the initial year
but
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 that reduced to 9% in
2001
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2001,
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 even though there was a rise
by
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 5% in 1991.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spending distribution
  • annual expenditures
  • budget allocation
  • highest expenditures
  • fluctuations
  • budget priorities
  • reduced spending
  • increased spending
  • emphasis
  • significant changes
  • consistent emphasis
  • rising costs
  • noteworthy shifts
  • spending patterns
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