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An increasing number of professionals, such as teachers and doctors are leaving their own countries to work in developed countries. What are the causes of this problems? What solutions can you suggest?

Nowadays
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Nowadays,
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 relocation of medical
personnels
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personnel
 and
teacher
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teachers
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 has increased dramatically in
the
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apply
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society's
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society
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.
Majority
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The majority
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 of people travelled abroad for greener pastures, career progression
and
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, and
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 to be able to
utilize
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utilise
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 modern technologies.
This
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 essay will discuss the causes of
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this
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these
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 changes and give
a
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apply
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recommendations to solve
it
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them
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.
Firstly
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, physicians and lecturers migrate to developed countries to earn more income compared to what they are being paid in their
nations
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home countries
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. Poor
renumeration
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remuneration
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 is one of the main reasons why people
travelled
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travel
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 out of their location to
work
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.
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, doctors and teachers in Nigeria are the
under rated
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underrated
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 professions that
received
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receive
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 poor wages, despite their contribution to
the
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apply
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society, the
government
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 did not give them what it takes to sustain themself and their families.
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,
poor
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a poor
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 working environment is
also
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 a contributing factors that prompt medical officers and tutors to look for
job
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jobs
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 in
advanced
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an advanced
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 country. There
are
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is
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 no modern
equipments
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equipment
 to
work
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 with,
such
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 as
CT
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a CT
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 scan machine in the
government
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 hospital to carry out
investigation
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investigations
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 for proper diagnosis.
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, some schools
does
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do
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 not have
a
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apply
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standard laboratories to carry out
practical
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practicals
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 for students, all
this
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 is affecting the efficiency and effectiveness of working
condition
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conditions
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.
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, lack of professional progression is another
challenges
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challenge
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 facing and educational and medical
sector
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sectors
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, causing employees to migrate to
another
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other
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 nations. All
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this
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these
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,
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apply
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 aforementioned reasons have an impact on migration. On the other
hands
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hand
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, there are several ways to mitigate the leaving of the medical workers and lecturers from ending
thier
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their
work
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 in their home countries
, one
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. One
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 important thing to put in place is good wages
, if
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. If
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 the
government
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 can implement a good salary structure that will meet earns
need
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needs
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, it will limit the relocation.
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, a conducive working environment will lure employees to
work
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 effectively, and
provision
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the provision
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 of adequate
equipments
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equipment
 in the institutions.
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,
introduction
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the introduction
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 of seminars and workshops will motivate the professionals to stay in their nations, and given promotions that
comes
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come
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 with
salary
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a salary
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 increment as
at
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apply
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when
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due. In conclusion, looking for greener pastures is a common thing in the society of todays
due to
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 poor salary
scheme
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schemes
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 and
instability
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economic instability
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 of economics,
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also
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as well as
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 poor working conditions. But,
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government
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the government
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 can reduce
this
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 problem by regulating
professionals
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professional
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workers
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workers'
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 monthly payment and
improve
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improving
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 the hospitals and schools
infrastuctures
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infrastructure
.

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content
Give more one idea for each point. Use short and clear facts.
conclusion
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content
The essay tries to answer both parts of the task.
structure
Link words are used to move from idea to idea.
content
A real country is named to show a point.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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