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Some people think that environmental problems need to be addressed on a global scale, while others believe that it is better to address them at the national level. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In recent years, the environmental problem has emerged as a matter of
significantly
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 concern to the general public.
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numbers
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 of individuals believe that protecting
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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 should be implemented on a global scale. Others argued that it is more
practice
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 to
handled
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 them at the regional level. In following essay will clarify both perspectives before
examinate
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examining
 personal opinion. You sent On the
one
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 hand, it is essential to
recognize
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recognise
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 that individuals should acknowledge that global cooperation may
brings
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 a multitude of certain benefits for preserving
environment
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the environment
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.
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, a critical point to highlight is that pooling financial resources from wealthy nations may support struggling
countries
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countries'
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 access
clean
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 technology.
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, international climate funds offered developing countries with valuable renewable energy resources which they
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afforded
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 by themself.
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, another pivotal aspect
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emphasize
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 is that there are several
problem
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problems
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 too huge
to
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for
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one
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 nation
be
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 able to manage alone as they cross borders.
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 is
due to
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 the fact that
,
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apply
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 the issue of ozone depletion should
solved
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be solved
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 globally, or banning harmful chemicals like CFC
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because
one
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nation
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nation's
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it
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 may affect
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all others in the world. You sent
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, it is hard to dispute that the way
access
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in
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at
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individual
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the individual
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 level
more
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 important than tackling
challenging
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 nature. First of all,
government
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the government
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 of each nation can create available solutions
fit
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that fit
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 their local conditions since each country has
different
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a different
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 geographic location and climate.
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,
one
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 can observe that Norway use hydroelectric power from
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mountains
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 and
river
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rivers
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,
while
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 Middle Eastern countries focus on solar
energy
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energy,
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where
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have
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 a lot of sunny. What is more,
national
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the national
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 government may allocate resources and set priorities more easily. To illustrate, they understand their urgent problems and can
activity
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 faster without international agreement,
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this
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is
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can
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 often
lost
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take
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 many years to perform. You sent In conclusion, both perspectives offer valuable insights.
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, I believe that
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it
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depend
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 on each small or big issue because
transboundary
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 issues and tailored solutions. Ultimately, a balanced approach that considers both sides is the most effective solution. You sent

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task
Clarify your position in the opening and restate it in the conclusion for a clear stance.
structure
Make your two body paragraphs start with a clear topic sentence that links to the question.
content
Give more clear examples and explain how they support your point.
language
Check grammar and spelling to avoid misread meaning.
content
You raise the idea of global vs local action and give examples.
structure
You show some attempt to compare both sides.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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