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he line graph illustrates the number of visitors to a particula

he line graph illustrates the number of visitors to a particula
The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of visitors coming to a specific Caribbean
island
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 during the period 2010 and 2017. Units are measured in millions.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of tourists coming to the
island
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 saw a significant increase during the given period. Tourists who are staying on
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island
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the island
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 displayed a higher trend, regarding the
number
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 of visitors, than the members
that
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who
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 waited on board the ship.
Initially
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, the entire passengers recorded going on
trip
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a trip
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 to the
island
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 was one
million
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 in 2010, which increased
dramaticlly
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dramatically
, peaking at around 3.5
million
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 by 2017. In 2010, approximately 1.5
million
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traveller
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travellers
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 lived on the
island
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, which remained steady during the first year. The following time,
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a
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dramatic jump to reach a peak of 1.5
million
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 during
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the
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2013-2015 period.
Similarly
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, visitors
stayed
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staying
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 on cruise recorded a significant increase from around 0.25
million
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 to just above 1
million
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 over the
five years
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five-year
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time
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period
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, from 2010 to 2015.
However
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, the
number
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 of tourists staying on the ship equated and
then
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 surpassed the one on the
island
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 during 2015 and 2016, peaking at 2
million
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 passengers by 2017.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, island, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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