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Working patterns have changed a lot. Now many people work online from home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this way of working.

In recent years, working online has become very popular because of the COVID-19 pandemic.
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 trend brings several advantages, it is
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 associated with a number of drawbacks.
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 essay will explore both sides. Accessibility is the biggest advantage
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 working from home is more convenient and easier, you can
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 anywhere and anytime.
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, when I was in college, I found it much easier to teach the students online rather than going to the university, which can be really helpful in situations like sickness. On top of that, by working online, you will save a lot of time and money. What I mean is you will save the cost of the fuel, save the time of getting ready, and
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 can be especially useful for people who live far away from their workplace. Together, these benefits will be beneficial for individuals. Despite these advantages, there are still a few drawbacks to consider. Online
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 may not be perfect as working in the workplace, the performance might be different because of several reasons,
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 as the monitoring, individuals perform better when someone like their boss keeps their eyes on them. If not, they might not do their best, which will probably create problems in the long run if ignored. In conclusion,
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 online
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 has some drawbacks, its benefits, including the ability to
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 any time and anywhere, clearly outweigh the disadvantages

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structure
Clear plan in the intro and a closing part that says what is good and bad.
content
The idea that online work can save time and money is easy to see.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Flexibility
  • Work-life balance
  • Commuting
  • Productivity
  • Personalized
  • Geographical constraints
  • Isolation
  • Overwork
  • Discipline
  • Dependency
  • Technical issues
  • Collaboration
  • Communication
  • Security issues
  • Sensitive information
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