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Every year your company organize a sports event for a local community but this year they can’t do it. Write a letter to your local newspaper about this. In your letter : Express your feelings about missing the sports event. : Tell them about your plan for next year. : Explain how this sports event is useful.

Dear Sir, I hope
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 letter finds you well and in the best of spirits . I am writing
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 letter to express my apology.
This
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 year, our company is not hosting any sports
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 in our local community
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due to
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 some reasons. Unfortunately, one of our investors declined to invest in
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event
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, and we are not financially
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 to manage a huge
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 independently. I really felt bad about the cancellation of the sports
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.
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 of the next year, we will make our business more profitable. By having enough funds, we will try to make more improvements in the stadium and add additional activities to attract a large crowd.
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event
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 brings the community together
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 and fosters well-being.
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 , people can learn how games develop confidence
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 and other interpersonal skills.
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 , these games provide a platform for the residents to show their hidden talent in front of a large audience, which may help to make
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future
 brighter. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon! Yours faithfully, Sam.

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language
Use short, clear lines and fix small grammar errors.
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Make the plan for next year clear with steps.
structure
Link ideas with small words so the flow is easy to follow.
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Explain more how the event helps the town and people.
tone
Keep a polite and formal tone.
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Check spellings and use simple words.
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Shows care for the town and the event.
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Gives a plan for next year.
tone
Polite opening and closing.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cancellation
  • disappointment
  • community engagement
  • physical activity
  • fostering
  • collaboration
  • local talent
  • platform
  • improvements
  • enjoyable experience
  • promoting health
  • collective spirit
  • next year’s event
  • anticipation
  • support
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