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Some people like to try new things, for example places to visit and types of food. other people prefer to keep doing things they are familier with. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some
people
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 like to try new things
to
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in
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 various
of
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apply
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way
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ways
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. Achieve
to
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apply
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something, buy new stuff, try
a
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apply
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food
of
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from
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 other countries,
visit
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and visit
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 cities. These humans are strong
to
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in
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 everything. They can't live
at
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for
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 least one second without any new
thing
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apply
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. These fascinating
people
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 with enormous passion to try something new, they absolutely reach to nice thing
which they are not
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without being
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 afraid. Other
people
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 prefer to do stuff they are familiar with. Those
type
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types
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 of
people
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consider more
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tend
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 to do the same thing every day. Because they are terrified to attend something new, they are not interested
to reach
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in reaching
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 to high level of living. Inside
such
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 types of
people
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lie
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lies
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a
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an
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incredible
keen
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keenness
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 which
want
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wants
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 to leave from the inside and do everything.
For example
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, I am the one
which
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who
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 can't live without any news. Why
I
Verb problem
do I
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prefer
this
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 way? Because
,
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apply
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 every
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people
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person
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 in
this
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 life
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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 to live without any
bore
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boredom
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. Who loves the bored man ? - Nobody. So, live
this
Linking Words
 life
worthly
Use the right word
worthily
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structure
Use a clear start that says what you will talk about and your view.
structure
Make a real plan: 1 paragraph on trying new things, 1 on staying with the old, then a short end with your view.
content
Give a reason for each idea and give one simple example.
grammar
Check the words for mistakes and use plain forms.
language
Use linking words to show contrast and to add ideas, like but, also, for example.
style
Keep sentences short and clear.
content
You try to talk about both sides.
content
You give your own view.
content
You use an example.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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