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Band 6.5

People are against the legalization of euthanasia while others support it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

The question of whether
euthanasia
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 should be
legalized
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 has divided public opinion for decades. Some see it as an act of mercy that spares people from unbearable suffering,
while
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 others consider it morally and ethically unacceptable.
This
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 essay will examine both perspectives before explaining why I believe
euthanasia
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 should remain prohibited. Advocates of
euthanasia
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 argue that terminally ill patients should have the right to choose how and when their lives end. From their point of view, prolonging
life
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 at any cost is not always humane, especially when treatments only extend pain rather than improve quality of
life
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. They
also
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 highlight the emotional toll on families who must watch loved ones suffer with no hope of recovery. In
such
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 cases,
euthanasia
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 is seen as a compassionate choice that preserves dignity and relieves both physical and emotional agony.
However
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, opponents stress that deliberately ending a
life
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 raises serious moral, legal, and religious issues. Many faiths teach that
life
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 is sacred and should not be cut short by human decision, regardless of the circumstances. From an ethical standpoint, granting doctors the authority to cause death could undermine trust in the medical profession.
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, with modern advances in palliative care, pain can often be managed effectively without resorting to
euthanasia
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.
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specialized
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 pain relief methods and emotional support can enable patients to spend their final days more comfortably
while
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 remaining in the care of loved ones. In my opinion,
euthanasia
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 should not be
legalized
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.
While
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 the intention to ease suffering is understandable, ending a
life
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 intentionally risks crossing ethical boundaries that society cannot afford to blur.
Instead
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, investment should be directed toward improving end-of-
life
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 care so patients can live their remaining days with dignity and comfort, without the need to hasten death.

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structure
The essay follows a clear plan with a view shown at the end. Keep this pattern in all essays.
coherence
Link ideas more clearly from one point to the next with simple words like 'also', 'but', 'so'.
content
Add a bit more real life example to show why people think in each view.
content
Give more reason to back your view, not just the saying it is right.
structure
Keep one idea in each paragraph and end with a short result.
vocabulary
Use plain, short words so the read is easy for all.
task
The stance is clear at the end.
content
The essay shows both sides well.
coherence
There is good use of paragraph and sign words to help flow.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • euthanasia
  • legal
  • illegal
  • choice
  • freedom
  • life
  • death
  • pain
  • suffering
  • end of life
  • doctor
  • patient
  • care
  • family
  • law
  • risk
  • safety
  • consent
  • pressure
  • abuse
  • moral
  • right
  • wrong
  • debate
  • care near the end of life
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