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Band 4

Many individuals believe that taking regular health check-ups is unnecessary if they feel healthy. Do you agree or disagree with this viewpoint? Explain your answer.

It is irrefutable that good
health
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 is an indispensable part of life.
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, some
people
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 believe that constant
health
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check-up
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check-ups
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is
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are
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 useless if they do not sense any
issue
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 with their
health
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.
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,
i
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I
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discord
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disagree
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to
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with
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this
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 statement
due to
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 certain reasons which
would
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will
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 be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. The primary reason for having regular
check-up
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check-ups
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 is that sometimes
people
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 can not realise the growing
issue
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 with their body
which
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, which
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 can be the cause of deadly
diseases
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diseases,
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 until they go for
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health
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a health
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 test.
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, cancer into different parts of
body
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the body
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like
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, like
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 as
,
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apply
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 blood, throat, brain, cervical so on, can grow without pain or any visible changes until it
goes to
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reaches
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 the
advance
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 stage , even
patient
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the patient
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 can underestimate the cervical pain
with
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as
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 normal
one
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apply
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.
Consequently
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, it is too late to
treate
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treat
 in most cases. At the same time, if individuals go for
general
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a general
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healty
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health
 check-up, with the help of
, they
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it, they
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 can know about any
issue
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 with their
health
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 at
initial
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an initial
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 stage
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, than
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than
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so
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 they can follow precautions and make it easy to treat. Another reason in
favor
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favour
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 of
health
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test
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tests
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 timely
is
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manner is
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 that
it
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they
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 aid
to promote
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in promoting
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 healthy habits and
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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. To make it
more clear
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clearer
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, if
people
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 go for
routine
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a routine
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health
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 exam, doctors not only
awaree
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inform
 them about any
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issue
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issues
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 with their
health
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 but
also
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 motivate
to
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them to
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 stay fit and healthy by giving them some valuable
advises
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advice
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.
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, doctors can advise exact
exersice
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exercise
 to the patient of cervical, proper sleep
according to
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 the age, weight, and work to the masses, which can help to build
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a heathy
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heathy
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healthy
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 body, like
peple
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people
 with good
physics
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physique
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, sportsmen,
athlete
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athletes
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, and
boudy builder
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bodybuilders
 generally examine their
health
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 time to time to get improvement in their performance. In conclusion,
i
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I
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 disagree with the statement that regular
health
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test
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tests
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is
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are
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 not essential if
people
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 do not sense any potential
issue
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 with their
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health
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health,
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 because
number
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the number
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 of
health
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problem
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problems
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 is hard to recognise without the help of doctors
and
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, and
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then
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 it could be too late to treat that illness.

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task response
Make your view very clear in the first paragraph and stay with it through the essay, with 2 or 3 strong reasons and clear examples.
coherence and cohesion
Organize ideas in true order. Put one idea per paragraph and link them with easy words like also, but, so.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar. Use short, simple sentences. Read aloud to hear mistakes.
lexical resource
Use simple words only. Do not use hard words. Use the correct word form.
content
Add more real examples and be precise about why check-ups help.
task response
The writer shows a clear choice to disagree with the view.
coherence
Two reasons are given to support the view.
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