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SECOND DAY The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

SECOND DAY The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table compares the number of the
milk
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 production in four
countries
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 (
Netherlands
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,
Australia
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, Tanzania,
Guatemala
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and Guatemala
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) in three years (1990, 2000 and 2010).
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, the
Netherlands
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 had the highest number in producing
milk
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,
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Guatemala produced the fewest. The count of
milk
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 production generally rose over the period for all four
countries
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. At the beginning of the period, in 1990, the
Netherlands
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 produced 11,262,000 litres of
milk
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, which was
slighlty
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slightly
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Australia
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.
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, both
countries
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 saw a considerable decrease after 10 years, with the
Netherlands
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respresenting
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representing
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about 11,155,000 in 2000 and
the
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Australia
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 around 11,105,000. By 2010,
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 increased
shaply
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sharply
,
whereas
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Australia
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 declined considerably.
The
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Tanzania produced 87,000 litres of
milk
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, which was more than triple the figure for
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Guatemala(26,000). But, these figures rose sharply to 1,42,000 and to 55,000 by 2000.
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, both
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 experienced a gradual growth by the end of the period, at about 1,55,000 and 84,000 respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, countries, netherlands, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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