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It is better for people to have a fixed work schedule than to have a flexible one. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It has been observed that recently
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 and more
people
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 are adopting a flexible
work
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schedule
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.
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 some
people
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 think it is better to
work
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with
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 one's
pace
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own pace
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 and
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 one's own choice of working place, others think it is better to follow a fixed
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schedule
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, as it ensures a more reliable output. Some workers may become more productive if they could have a more flexible
work
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plan
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 as some individuals like to
work
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 at night
instead
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 of working in the morning, as normal working hours require. In the meantime, some
people
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 have other duties like sending kids to school or preparing meals for the family, which
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prevents
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 them not
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 able to follow the usual timetable that most companies adopt.
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,
this
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 group of
people
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 may prefer to follow their own timetable as they can better arrange the tasks they have and finish the assigned
work
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in
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 their own pace.
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, some
people
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 are more suitable to follow a fixed timetable for
work
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. As human beings, it is normal to get distracted by different things
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 if there is
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a
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fixed time slot set for
work
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, it is quite unlikely for employees to finish the task on time.
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, a clear
work
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schedule
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 can
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 help workers to keep up with
development
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the development
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 of the tasks, especially for a project that requires collaboration between colleagues. A fixed
work
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schedule
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 ensures
team
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that team
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 members
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contribute evenly to the project. In a nutshell, some
people
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 may appreciate the freedom a flexible
work
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schedule
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 brings,
others
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while others
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 are better
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suited to
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 follow a fixed
schedule
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 as it helps workers to finish the task on time and it is
also
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 good for team collaboration.

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task response
You should show a clear view of which way you think. State your own opinion in the end and say what is best, with a short reason.
coherence
Make your plan clear in the essay. Use one idea per paragraph. Start with a topic sentence and end with a small note that links to the next idea.
vocabulary
Use simpler words. Some words are not in common list. Use 'work plan', 'time table' instead of hard words. Give more real examples that are easy to read.
coherence
Keep link words like 'for example', 'in addition', 'however' to guide the reader. This helps flow.
structure
Make your ending line clear. Sum up your view in a simple line.
content
The essay shows a fair view of both sides.
coherence
It uses clear phrases to link ideas like 'On the other hand' and 'In a nutshell'.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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