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A magazine wants to include contributions from its readers for an article called ‘The book that influenced me most’. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine about the book that influenced you most. In your letter Describe what this book was about Explain how this book influenced you Say whether this book would be likely to influence other people

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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 letter regarding the article you are going to write for the most influential
book
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. The
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 that I will discuss is '
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 is Gold', and it's about
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 management, which is a crucial aspect in every person's life. Before I read
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book
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, I had a lack ot
time
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 management skills, which negatively impacted my daily routine
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 I didn't have enough leisure
time
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 to spend with my family and friends. After I completed
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book
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, it changed my mindset
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 the various tips it contains
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 managing
time
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 effectively. I am highly confident that
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book
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 will influence so many people who are struggling to manage their
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 and balance between their job and home lives, because I have many co-workers complain to me every day about
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 issue, so they really need a viable solution to improve their lives. Looking forward to hearing from you, Best regards, Lamar

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grammar
Check spell and form: fix typos and wrong phrases (e.g., 'ot' should be 'of', 'co-workers' should be 'co-workers'). Use simple, clear sentences.
structure
Try to split the writing into 2 or 3 short parts. Each part should hold one main idea.
content
Add one exact example of how the book changed your daily life to show the impact more clearly.
lexical
Use only common words where you can, and keep a calm, polite tone.
tone
Polite opening and closing are good.
content
The letter tells what the book is about and how it helped you.
content
There is a clear sense of how the book could help others too.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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