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your next-door neighbour often listens to loud music at night. Due to the loud music, you often struggle to sleep and experience frequent headaches.

Dear Building Manager, I am writing to formally express my concern regarding a persistent issue with my next-door neighbour, who consistently plays excessively loud music during the late evening hours. Specifically, the noise usually begins at approximately 8 p.m. and frequently continues well past midnight, thereby violating the expected quiet hours of the building. As a direct consequence of
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 disturbance, my ability to sleep has been severely compromised, which in turn has negatively affected my
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 health and well-being.
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, I have experienced constant fatigue, difficulty concentrating at work, and increased stress levels. Since I begin work very early in the morning, uninterrupted rest during the night is essential for maintaining my productivity and mental health.
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, I respectfully request that you take appropriate action to address
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 matter.
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, I would appreciate it if you could remind all residents of the building’s quiet hours policy and, if necessary, speak directly with my neighbour to ensure that the volume of their music is kept at a reasonable level during the night. I believe that
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 measures would not only benefit me but
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 other residents who may be experiencing similar disturbances. I trust that you will treat
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 matter with urgency, and I look forward to receiving your response regarding the steps that will be taken to resolve it. Yours sincerely, Mira

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task response
Task response: The letter stays on topic and asks for action. To push to a higher band, add a clear plan or date for when action should be taken and say how you will check it.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The order of ideas is good. Use more linking words to show how ideas connect across paragraphs.
tone
Clear aim and polite tone
content
Reason and detail are clear
format
Good format with a greeting and sign-off

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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