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The table below gives information about Salaries of Secondry / high school teachers in five countries .

The table below gives information about Salaries of Secondry / high school teachers in five countries .
The given table depicts the percentage of secondary/high school
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teachers
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 and various
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 in
there
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year
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 2009. Looking at the graph from
general
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a general
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 perspective, Australia years
taken
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to reach top
salary
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 9 the
maximum
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top
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salary
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48.000$
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of 48.000$
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. They're starting with 34.600$.
Salary
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 a
year
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 48.000$.
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,Denmark
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teachers
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teachers'
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 starting
salary
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47.000$
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is 47.000$
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,
maximum
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the maximum
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salary
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 there is 54.000$ . Take 8 years to have the maximum
Zalal
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 why they take every
year
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salary
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 54.000$. Come to Luxembourg
teacher
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teacher's
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salary
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 per
year
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 is 112.000$ . The teacher starts with 80.000$
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; the
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the
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they
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 need 30
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year
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years
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to have the maximum
salary
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139.000$
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of 139.000$
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. On
other
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the other
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 hand,
Korea
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Korean
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 and Japanese
teachers
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 need it around 37-34
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year
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years
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to
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old to
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 have the maximum
salary
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. They take
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salary
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a salary
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 per
year
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 52.600$for
Koreanteachers
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Korean teachers
and
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, and
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 Japanese
teachers
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 take 49.000$ .
In
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contrast
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 the maximum
salary
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 for Japanese
62.400$and Korean
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is 62,400$ and for Koreans
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84.500$
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is 84.500$
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. They start with 30.500$ and 28.000$.
Although
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 the table
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the salaries for school
teacher
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teachers
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, the tutor
need
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needs
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 more experience to have the maximum
salary
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words teachers, year, salary with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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