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Writing Samples
Band 3

Many people now study or work from home. What are the advantage and disadvantages?

There is no denying the fact that there are two kinds of people working
studying
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or
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 at home.
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 it is a commonly held belief that humans can
work
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 from their laptops. There is
also
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 an argument that the other takes courses online.
This
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 essay will analyse
this
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 topic from both
of
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view points
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 and express my opinion. On one hand, the smart device
is
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makes
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 more
easily
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 for assessment uploads. In
the
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other words, the iPad is better for online learning
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such
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, such
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 as
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YouTube
 and
watch
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watching
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 videos.
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, when you use the computer
for
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to
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 update
you
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your
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work
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 is much better than
you go
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going
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 to
work
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 and loss your money
for
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 gasoline.
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, in 2020, all people used to
work
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 or study from home because
Corona virus
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, which
causes
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caused
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 a
fair
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fear
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.
On the other hand
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, if you start
business
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a business
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 from your
house
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house,
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 you will get more money
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such
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, such
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 as
,
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apply
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 Noon, SHEIN and Amazon. It is
also
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 possible to say that Amazon had a lot of income
about
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of about
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 3
billions
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billion
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 dollars.
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, building your own job from the website
it
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is the new version.
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, I have
one
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a
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 website
sales
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 shoes and the daily net is around 1000 riyals. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
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, on
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. On
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 balance,
however
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, I tend to believe that I usually get a lot of money from
the
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working or studying at home,
I
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and I
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prefer to spend more time
with
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 my development.

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structure
Plan with clear four parts: intro with your view, two body parts for each side, and a short conclusion that restates your view.
coherence
Use a clear topic sentence for each paragraph and keep one main idea in each paragraph.
content
Give real and simple examples that relate to home work or study, and explain why they show your point.
language
Check grammar and keep simple, correct sentences. Use common words and short phrases.
content
Avoid adding many off topic facts like company income unless you show how they help your point.
content
The writer tries to discuss both sides and gives some ideas.
structure
There is a clear attempt to give a final view and wrap up.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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