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Band 3

people say that crime reports on TV and newspaper have many disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that crime on social media is a bad idea.
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 it is a commonly held belief that there are many
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wrong things
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 if the crime shows
on
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are on
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 the
smart phone
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smartphone
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 or
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news
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the news
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. There is
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 an argument that opposes it
, in
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. In
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 my opinion, I consider that showing the truth is
a
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very important for the community.
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 with, the technology has many people
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who followed
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followed
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follow
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 the
news
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and
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, and
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 they need to know about what happened in
real
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the real
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 world.
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, having the TV in your home
not
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is not
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 only for
news
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 but
just
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 as a security guard.
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, the newspaper
teachs
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teaches
 you so you know about your hometown.
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, my father
is
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always
watch
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watches
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 the
news
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 to know about the situation. Another point to consider, there is no unsafe place
so
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, so
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 you need to read the
news
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 to understand. It is
also
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 possible to say that reading the daily reports
help
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helps
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 to save money from the kidnappers.
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, it is
a
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better to have a cabinet to keep or manage your budget.
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,
install
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installing
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camera
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a camera
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 in your home will cover your bedroom from
the
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crime
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crime,
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such
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 as there are a lot of cabinets, cameras in the store. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that nothing can stop you
to see
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from seeing
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 the difference worldwide from the
crim
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crime
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 and the war
so
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, so
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 I prefer to encourage
the
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people to see the
news
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.

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structure
Make your view clear in the first paragraph and repeat it in the end.
content
Give 2 or 3 main ideas and keep them in order.
examples
Use facts or small examples that fit the idea.
language
Use short, plain sentences and check spellings and errors.
coherence
Link ideas with words like and, but, because, so to show how ideas fit.
content
Stay on the question and not go far off topic.
content
The writer shows a view is given.
effort
There is an effort to give some example.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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