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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in oreder to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
There is no denying the fact that some people
beileve
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believe
teach
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teaching
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new
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a new
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language
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 to get work and for
the
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apply
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other
activies
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activities
.
While
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 it is a commonly held
belife
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belief
 that learn a new different
language
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help
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helps
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 to get
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job
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a job
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 and travel. There is
also
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argument
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an argument
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 that there are many
benifit
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beneficial
 ways to gain
language
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.
This
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 essay will analyse
this
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 topic from both
point
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points
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 of
views
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view
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 and express my opinion.
Body · 1
On one hand,
the
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apply
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English is
international
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an international
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language
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 that can be used anywhere for work, business and
traveling
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travelling
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.
In other words
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, some
country
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countries
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 hire the employer
he
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who
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 has
a
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apply
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good communication
with
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in
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english
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English
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.
In addition
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, learning a new
language
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supprot
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supports
to open
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opening
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job
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a job
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such
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, such
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 as
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to
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, to
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 make it strong.
For example
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, the English
teachs
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teach
 us to gain a lot of information about the culture in other places.
Body · 2
On the other hand
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, the skill of
have
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having
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language
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a language
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 is possible to teach your family how important it is.
Body · 3
It is possible to say that the family need to be
more smart
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smarter
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 to get the
job
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 and
communication
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communicate
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 with
other
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others
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.
Moreover
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, the famous movie you can watch
it
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apply
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without
translate
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translating
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 it
which
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, which
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 is more
enjoable
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enjoyable
.
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, my father
teaches
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taught
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 me the
language
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 when I was 10 years old,
while
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 now I
got
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have
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 the
job
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easly
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easily
 because of that.
Conclusion
In conclusion, there
are
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is
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 no easy answer to
this
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 question, on balance,
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however
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however,
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 I tend to believe that in some
contry
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countries
 there are a lot of majors in the university
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that supprot
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supprot
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support
 the foreign
language
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 at
the
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apply
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all
time
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times
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. I prefer to
explained
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explain
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this
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language
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 to the partners so they have
idea
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an idea
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 for
new
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the new
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 version.

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planning
Plan what you want to say first. Make a simple order for your ideas.
cohesion
Use clear linking words to show how ideas go with each other.
content
Answer both sides and give your own view clearly.
language
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content
The essay tries to talk about both sides and share a view.
structure
It ends with a line that shows an opinion.
examples
A real life example is used to back a point.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proficiency
  • immersion
  • communication
  • cultural nuances
  • intrinsic motivations
  • cognitive benefits
  • personal enrichment
  • multicultural understanding
  • linguistic diversity
  • heritage languages
  • globalized job market
  • valuable asset
  • empirical evidence
  • tolerance
  • harmonious society
  • perspectives
  • cultural exchange
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