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Many students today graduate high school and then go to study in another country Give the advantages and disadvantages of studying overseas

Nowadays , after many changes in the strategy of education , my students , after graduation from high school, tend to
study
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 in another country. There are
a
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both
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 positive
advantage
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and
a
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negative disadvantage . Both of them are very important to
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.
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this
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 assay will mention
the
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apply
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both points of
views
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view
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. On the one hand,in terms of advantages, there are many common
advantage
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advantages
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.
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study
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studying
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 in another
county
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country
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is
wonderful
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a wonderful
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 personal experience . Many studies confirmed that 90% of
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student
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students
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feeling
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feel
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 well
,
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apply
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when they
are
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apply
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work hard
in out
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outside
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 of confirm zone .
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, the high
confident
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confidence
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 and the high social
intelligent
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intelligence
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 are the best positive points .
Second,
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study
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studying
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 outside is a wonderful learning
.
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experience.
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 It helps them to learn more than
study
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 .
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example
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, cooking food , solving
problem
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problems
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 and saving money .
According to
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 Kuwait
college
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College
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 published
study
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, 70% of students have a stronger learning
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due
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experience due
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 to
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study
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studying
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out side
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outside
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 the city.
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, studying outside
creat
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creates
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 a powerful life.
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, it
help
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helps
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student
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students
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 to save
them self
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themselves
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.
One
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 the other hand, in terms of disadvantages ,
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Firstly
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firstly
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, preventing the family gathering is the famous disadvantage .
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example
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,
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student
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students
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 lose the happy time in Ramadan and Eid .
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Bahrain
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a Bahrain
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 Academic
study
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,
70٪
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70%
؜ of
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student
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students
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feeling
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 sad
due to
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 the
preventing
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 of the family party .
Secondly
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, the high
cost
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 is a hard disadvantage .
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example
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, the high
cost
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 of
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apply
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living , the
rise
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cost
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 of
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food and the increasing
cost
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books
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of books
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, the overthinking is the affective action .
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example
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 ,
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student
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students
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 feeling
stress
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stressed
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 and eating too much , if they have a hard
exams
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exam
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.
This
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 will affect their body and their brain . In conclusion, increasing the positive aspect and decreasing the negative aspect will improve the
the
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apply
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positive points with
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a batter
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batter
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better
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 future.

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structure
Plan first: a short intro that says your view, two body parts for good and bad, a short ending.
coherence
Make one idea in a line. Link ideas with simple words like and, but, so.
content
Give facts or clear notes for the ideas. Do not use too many guesses.
grammar
Use short, correct sentences. Check your grammar when you finish.
task response
Keep to the topic. Put the good side first, then the bad side.
lexical resource
Use easy words. Do not use hard or new words.
structure
Intro and end exist.
content
Both sides are talked about.
content
Some examples are used.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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