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Band 2.5

In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people.

In various nations, many individuals believe that pupils
living
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 more time
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early
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. Few individuals say an ageing
people
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rises
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pose
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 difficulties for governments. Now,
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be explained
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explain
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its
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apply
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some benefits
as well as
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few
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a few
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 drawbacks in
next
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 two graphs. On one side, some
people
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 think that now individuals
living
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are living
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long as
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longer
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compare
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compared
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 to before
and
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apply
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it is
create
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creates
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 some problems for governments because when
people
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living
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live
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long
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 at the age of ending it means up the age of 55 when they do not work.
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, in simple
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 they
do
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are
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 not able
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to
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 do special.
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for
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 example.
we
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 can see easily
to ward develop
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that developing
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 nations that when the
people
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increase
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reach
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 the age of 55 there
went
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move
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 into old homes where some girls and boys
keep
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apply
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take care of
old
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the old
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people
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. Result, they
living
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are living
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 on the
government
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government's
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expanse
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expense
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. On the other hand,
people
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 living longer
it
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apply
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have some benefits.
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, they can
guides
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guide
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better
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apply
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our son related
to
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 practical life and
business
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 life.
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stance
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, a man was living in India
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first
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first,
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 he was
confuse
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in
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about
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 our
business
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when
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 he started his
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business
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business,
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 he
gone
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went
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 in
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a lose
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lose
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 at
the his
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 father his that he do not
leave
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to leave
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 his
business
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 and
give
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gave
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him advise
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advise
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advice
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for
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on
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 some activities. After some
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months
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month
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month,
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 his
business
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did running
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good
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well
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at
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in
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end
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 he became a big man.

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grammar
Fix grammar and spell words so you can show your idea cleanly. Use short, clear sentences.
structure
Make a plan before you write. Use one paragraph for the problem, one for the good side, and one for your view.
coherence
Start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence that says the main idea.
cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like 'also', 'but', and 'for example'.
examples
Give a real example for each point to show your idea clearly.
vocabulary
Check spell and use common words. Avoid hard words.
content
The topic is clear and the writer tries to show both sides.
structure
Some parts show a plan and an effort to give example.
content
The idea of benefits and problems is present.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ageing population
  • benefits
  • disadvantages
  • advantages
  • experience
  • knowledge
  • contribution
  • economy
  • society
  • healthcare
  • youth employment
  • community
  • intergenerational support
  • volunteerism
  • mentorship
  • increased demand
  • pension costs
  • social welfare systems
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • intergenerational conflict
  • technological adaptability
  • dependency
  • effective
  • skill development
  • employment opportunities
  • intergenerational solidarity
  • communication
  • lifelong learning
  • technological literacy
  • age-friendly
  • social policies
  • infrastructure
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